Initially devised with two parts (I – Lethimos Camerata and II – Moratorium), I’ve decided to make Moratorium the first part of Canto III, as not to over-saturate this already emotionally-heavy composition.
This one, although deserving of a better construction, was very hard to compose, hence the time it took to execute; What may seem simple at first sight, as in, a victim of sexual abuse in Greeces old customs of pederasty claiming his own control over such enacted violence (a storyline I had constructed long-ago, as to inter-connect with many other elements of the story), also holds a necessary and integral part of my own life. How may we cope with what was forcefully taken from us? Well, I do not know, I’m still in a path of surviving myself; but I do know I must validate my own pain, and feel it in its most tangible form — a mass replacing that which has been taken. For too long, Lethimos refused to feel, lest he feel the pain which composed him; I, too, ran for too long; I, perhaps not as tragically as Lethimos, must also claim what lays still, rather than exalt what has been taken. I do not know to which level this may apply to you, my dearest reader, but know this: I will not bestow upon you any ill-thoughts or pity, but instead, dare to listen, for our pains, are those which we alone know best.
I love you all, you who reads me, and not lightly, but as sincerely as I can. I still haul much pain, but having that pain translate to beauty in your eyes, is a solace only a firm hug can equal.
Thank you, so much.
JOHNNY
To say this is well written doesn’t even begin to do it justice! Warm hugs Johnny 😊❤️
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Thank you so much Suzanne!, your hugs, despite virtual, are still ever-so heartwarming.
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This is beutiful i like how death teach us about life i look forward to more you potry
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Thank you Amy, it means a lot to me!
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It’s rare to find poetry (or any writing)that’s so competent these days. It’s amazing how you manage to stay true to your original intention while still working in form. And while using Ancient Greece as a setting
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Albeit seemingly hard, I found it strangely easier to be honest and sincere through the medium of a character; and, since I’m very much a novice to poetry, it allows me to nurture different elements without the strain of my own emotions playing an over-bearing role.
Also, it is very fun to make stories, more-so than I thought!
Thank you for your kindness, I have long ways to go, but I deeply care for the encouragement these comments provide.
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I wouldn’t consider you a novice 🙂
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In English (I’m Portuguese), I’ve been writing for a bit less than a year! If that isn’t novice, I don’t know what is, haha. But thank you, your gentility is truly meaningful to me.
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Beautiful as always.
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Thank you Nell, I’m very glad you thought so!
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Hi. Thanks for sharing such chaos into order. Powerful, emotional, thoughtful. Hug deserved. Many granted indeed. Well writ.
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I love references to Thanatos! In the iteration I am familiar with, he is Somnos brother, and the god of death without struggle, or peaceful death.
While beautiful, much of this is difficult to decode and unpack. It’s not particularly accessible, but nothing says it has to be.
Your gratitude to readers resonates with me a great deal. Without readers, immortal words are meaningless, and no one pens immortal verse without practice and FEEDBACK! If I could I would reblog that last paragraph thanking your readers.
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Zerk! I adore your feedbacks.
Yes, it was a composition which, being very familiar to my struggles, was harder to maintain the distance necessary for full clarity of thought. I tried as much as I could, and I’m sure further compositions will not suffer so much from my own struggles. After all, that is the exact purpose of this work, to nurture my betterment.
I must thank you, your words are always kind; you may cite anything I’ve written whenever, I have no issues with it, may it suit what you feel!
Again, thank you much Zerk.
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I have found in dealing with issues that are difficult, it is easier to break them down into smaller pieces, then link them together into a longer one if necessary, but take plenty of time with each one. This is why my stuff is mostly quite short, and I have broken a couple of them into two pieces; the poetry is one piece, the prose another. This would be “memento mori” and “thirty years”, also “razor contemplation” and “peace like a razor” this goes back to my own worldview which is divinely described in Longfellow’s poem “the builders”
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I believe that to be only partially viable; one without little foresight might have issues understanding only half of the story, and if the complete conveyance relies on two peaces, it is only natural that they are assumed to be read in short succession. Poetry is a low-energy Art, like Painting or Music, it doesn’t overly rely on large amounts of time to be understood.
Division of thought is, then, able to be manipulated within the poems themselves. One such example of this is Eliot’s Four Quartets, where over-saturation of a subject becomes itself the subject of presentation.
However, this poem itself (Canto II), was divided into two parts, when it was initially comprised of only one. Nevertheless!, I do agree that this one over-condenses emotional sprouts, yet, I believe the problem lies more in the writing itself and less in the division.
I’ve read some of the poems you mentioned! I have not read the dual-razor ones, I must find them promptly.
I really appreciate the dialogue, Zerk!
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I completely agree. There is no rigid set of rules that works for everyone. Keep writing! I love your stuff!
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Johnny I have no words for your talent and an so humbled that you would acknowledge any of my feeble work in comparison you yours. You have sent me to be my one expression of the written word whether classical, correct, or awful. Your talent brings Glory to God who created you and gifted you.
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I feel like wow, and speechless. Heart touching, and here my words for you, your words are your gift! Cheers and peace to you!
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Beautiful ✨
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